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spacedlaw
Nathalie Boisard-Beudin
Italy, Rome

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Promise

South of the river is a land where children have plenty to eat. And sweets too. It is a place where their dolls and Mommies are safe from harm. We will be there soon. Mommy promised. She said she'll secure us into the car while the other is not looking and we will drive all night and in the first light of the morning we will be there. The sun will be golden and we will have cookies that she baked with special magical herbs. Then she will drive into the river and everything will be all right once more.

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spacedlaw Comment by: spacedlaw - 2008-10-19 02:22
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Thanks for spotting the typo (how this one escaped my spell checker is a mystery).
Yes, this mother drugged her children and herself before taking the plunge (this is loosely based on a real story from a few years back - except that in the real story the mother had escaped),
Thank you all for your support.
seancolledge Comment by: seancolledge - 2008-10-18 17:40
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Yeah I had some cookies with magical herbs in the Netherlands!

Am I reading right that she's driving in TO the river, as in a murder/suicide? If so, it makes your already powerful paragraph even more thought provoking

PS night, not 'nigth' ;)
Promking007 Comment by: Promking007 - 2008-10-18 09:04
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Good thoughts here Nathalie. Do we make promises to future generations for our benefit? Their benefit? Or both?
Hakuna Comment by: Hakuna - 2008-10-18 08:08
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Whoa, that is a powerful scene you described here.
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